🎬 Page 2 - Work in progress


Thumbnails from Silvio:

Considering the thumbnail, I think Anastasia should appear only on page 3. Here are my suggestions:

Silvio says he’s skeptical about an entire page without any text. New suggestions:

New thumbnails from Silvio:

My comments:

  • I am not very seduced by frame 3, I find that it is not very natural.
  • In frame 5, in the layout, I put “Josie, surprised but happy with the meeting”. But I find that it does not work. She should only be surprised. I also propose to change the text, which does not suit me.

I will modify the layout and provide a thumbnail proposal.

New proposal:

And here is the pencil:

Please help with the dialogues!